That it's horrible. I wouldn't say it's rushed, but I don't know, I don't really feel very inspired writing poems nowadays. Maybe it'll come back.
I know you're there, I know you're waiting,
But the move just seems too great.
These emotions seem to be congregating,
As I slip into a meaningless state.
You think it's what you desire,
But do you really know?
What is it you wish to acquire,
Or is this all for show.
You keep telling me it's not,
I find myself believing you.
You keep telling me it's what you want,
I find out that it's true.
There is nothing that I can do,
Even though it upsets you,
I don't know if it'll ever be through,
And I'm sorry, that I'm the reason you're blue.
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Are you going to rationale that my dear? QUESTION!! :P Do you think that the persona of the poem uses a voice of regret? Who is the person referred to, this mysterious 'you'?
no I'm not. I guess they do, but at the same time I guess not. Who knowz, noez knowz. Words are funny aren't they? It's not a personal poem, so it's not referring to anyone.
You mean there is no stimulus that the poem is drawing on? Not an experience for which one regrets, speaking to a party who has experienced loss and consoling them in their sadness?
nope. It's just a poem. However, there may be subconscious feelings that were brought up in writing it? Do you think it was based upon something?
Just the first and last stanzas would appear to be about a big change, resulting in sadness for the disappointed party and guilt for the persona. It needn't relate at all in any way though, that's just how it seemed to me. I guess to me the last stanza just seemed like a person letting down someone they care for, and feeling regret and even agony for the unfortunate mistake.
'There is nothing I can do / Even though it upsets you / I don't know if it'll ever be through / And I'm sorry, that I'm the reason you're blue".
What do you think?
Oh yeah. Sorry I thought you meant does it relate to me in that way.
Yeah it's pretty much just the tale of someone who wants to help someone, but can't. They really wish they could, but there's something that is stopping them. They realise that the person is quite upset, and they know it's because they caused it to be so.
I thought the last word pun was nice, but it doesn't relate to me
well, you wrote it, so I assume you know whether or not it relates to you:P It is indeed a tidy little pun. I feel that it was not a poem about me, that it was about a very sad girl quite close to me. And I was curious to see if this poem was a vent for any guilt or anguish you may feel, post-situation. I'm extremely sorry to be the obstacle which is comes between your 'sorry' and forgiveness. But if you say it's not about anything... so be it :)
It's not about Anna.
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I should possibly have stated that in my first comment, and have saved much cryptic wording?
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